The applicant clearly put time into the structure and planning of this essay.
He uses the platform of football to discuss and demonstrate his personal growth and development through the high school years.
If I fail, it doesn't matter if they mock or ridicule me; I'll just try again and do it better.
I realize that it is necessary to risk failure in order to gain success.
The coaches have always said before games that nothing is impossible; I know that now. Whether I succeed or fail is irrelevant; it is only important that I have tried and tested myself.
Comments: The topic of this essay is how the applicant has matured and changed since his freshman year. One of the strengths of this essay is that it is well organized.All the while, I went to practice and everyday, I went home physically and mentally exhausted.Yet my apprehension prevailed as I continued to fear getting put in the game in case another player was injured.Princeton, Athlete (Football)I have learned a great many things from participating in varsity football.It has changed my entire outlook on and attitude toward life.From my coaches and fellow teammates, I have learned to work well with others in a group, as it is necessary to cooperate with teammates on the playing field.But most important, I have also gained self-confidence.I didn't want to be the one at fault if I dropped the ball and the play didn't succeed.I did not want the responsibility of helping the team because I was too afraid of making a mistake.Each hair on the back of my neck sprang to attention, as I strained to hear the women's inflammatory remarks.I gripped my bag of Mc Donald's harder with each insulting phrase.